I am a Year 4 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 12 and my teacher is Miss Izelle. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hi Quinn, you've mentioned lots of different arguments to support your position about zoos here. You talked about the lack of space, the possibility of diseases, the ability of animals to look after themselves. I think it'll be great if you separated these points into different paragraphs. Then you can give more explanation for each of your ideas. For example, you can explain how a lack of space means that tigers can't exercise their muscles. This can impact the way that they hunt in the wild.
My favourite animal is the meerkat, I love the way they poke their heads out like little security guards!
Hi Quinn, you've mentioned lots of different arguments to support your position about zoos here. You talked about the lack of space, the possibility of diseases, the ability of animals to look after themselves. I think it'll be great if you separated these points into different paragraphs. Then you can give more explanation for each of your ideas. For example, you can explain how a lack of space means that tigers can't exercise their muscles. This can impact the way that they hunt in the wild.
ReplyDeleteMy favourite animal is the meerkat, I love the way they poke their heads out like little security guards!